To: My dear MP3 player
Hello! I'm your owner Yejin Cho. Are you having a nice day?
MP3 player, I'm writing a letter to you because you are so thankful.
We first met at Christmas when I was 4th grade.
I was really happy to see you as a Christmas present.
When I got you at first, I was always holding you and always listening to music. But when I got a smartphone, I thought I didn't need you anymore because there was also MP3 inside my phone. So you were just inside my desk for a long,long time.
But I think I'll have to really thank you.
First, when I was bored and had nothing to do, you gave me music to listen and made me not bored anymore. Also, while doing homework or studying, you made me concentrate. I really like you!
And I like your design. You're not as big as other MP3 players that my friends have. It's good that you are small because it's easy to carry and you're not heavy. At first I was a little bit embarrassed because you were small and envied my friends whose MP3 player was big.But I think the size doesn't matter!
I am sorry, because I had thrown you many times before. You were sometimes working strange so I had to fix it. I'm so sorry...I'll never do it again.
Good bye!!:-)
From: Ye jin
Yejin,
답글삭제You need to use more descriptive language when writing an ode. An ode is a poem so use personifications (give your MP3 player human qualities), and metaphors (compare it to something). You should also add pictures to your post. Please try writing another ode with these things in mind.
Hi~~Your ode is great!!
답글삭제Hi!
답글삭제It is a well-written ode, but you have to use more descriptive language such as personifications and metaphors to make your ode more poetic. Also, try to use some pictures or videos to make your post more enjoyable. Keep working hard~
-Yongwook, Oh (Writing TA)